I smell the salt in seaside breeze
watch it toss the sun-sweetened flowers
and taste the nectar with droning bees
feel how it caresses my face and knees
with kisses, the promises of lazy hours
with books beneath shade of dancing trees.
On porches, we recline, so at ease–
a temporary haven, even if not ours–
imagining the taste of nectar, the droning bees
An evening walk, some ice cream, please!
wishing if and only we had the powers–
to stop a moment, to smell the salty, seaside breeze.
If we could a moment freeze,
would we box it up, using super-powers
to hold fast summer’s nectar-taste and droning bees?
For long ago summer vacations, the time of these–
ocean, sun, daughters’ laughter, and showers–
relaxing in the salt-scent of a seaside breeze,
of dreams, tasting the nectar with droning bees.
For Day 25 of NaPoWriMo the challenge is “to write a poem that
- Is specific to a season
- Uses imagery that relates to all five senses (sight, sound, taste, touch, and smell)
- Includes a rhetorical question, (like Keats’ “where are the songs of spring?”)”
The dVerse poetry form this past month has been the villanelle, so here’s one more before it closes. Sarah’s template on the prompt page is most helpful.
My happy place! Beautiful, Merril.
Thank you, Jill!
With a landscape like the photo, your verses come with that taste of the sea.
To have salt breezes and droning bees is summer bliss 🙂
Yes, it is. 🙂
Love the beach! (I guess that’s why I’m in Florida … .)
Hahaha. I guess so! Thanks!
At ease and lazy weave nicely through this, Merril.
Thank you, Ken.
So beautiful Merril, you write so lovely!
Thank you so much, Holly!
Close my eyes and I’m there…and you’ve mastered the villanelle! (K)
Thank you very much, Kerfe!
Breeze and bees in the summer… what can be better?
Thank you, Dale. 🙂
Yes. Goose bumps despite the summer heat. This is my life, my love, my dream to come – my week at the OC NJ beach. Ahhhhhhhhhhh.
Thanks, Pam. I have such fond memories of the summer vacations we took there with our kids. The photo though is actually Cape May from last April–still Jersey shore! 🙂
Yup, Cape May counts as the Jersey Shore. It’s a lovely place. My parents began taking my brother and I to OC NJ as toddlers, and we’ve continued the tradition with our kids and now their kids, who have fallen in love with everything you describe in your poem. ❤
Aww–that makes me happy. We don’t have that generational connection–but the time there with our kids was special.
well done merril! and congrats on the feature!!
Thank you very much!!
Congratulations! I haven’t been thrilled with most of the NaPo features so far, but this one deserves it 🙂
Thank you very much!
I saw your comment in my inbox before I checked the prompt. It’s still early morning here.
As soon as I began to read, I recognised the prompt – a brilliant take on it
Thank you very much, Derrick!
(I wonder if this comment was supposed to go with my Orpheus poem?) Either way, thank you! 🙂
It was meant for this one
Thank you. 🙂
Congratulations Merril!! (K)
Thank you, Kerfe!
Ah, Merril – I’m going back through the villanelles, and realised I hadn’t commented on this one – though I was sure I had? Maybe on another platform? If I haven’t, it’s lovely, really captures the mood of a summer evening, layered with evenings from the past, happy, but with a whisper of melancholy at the transience of life. Beautiful.
Thank you very much, Sarah. High praise indeed!