
Edward Hopper, New York Restaurant
“I don’t know why I was surprised every time love started or ended.” Perhaps I wasn’t, not really. Not in those days. I was like the wind blowing in and out of places, and love followed—a gentle breeze or a gale—either way it was here and gone. Until Joe.
We both had worked as codebreakers. All that’s history now, of course, but even now, I can’t give you any details. Enemies remain—secrets, too. I didn’t even notice him at first.
Then one day, I glanced up as he was consulting with a colleague. He looked at me and nodded. I nodded back. Without a word, we had an understanding. Later, we met for coffee…
It’s been thirty years. He brings me coffee every morning. I’m surprised if he doesn’t spill a drop or two. But that will be our little secret.
This is my flash fiction “prosery” piece for my prompt today on dVerse. Our pieces cannot be longer than 144 words. Mine is exactly 144 words. The first line comes from a poem by Jane Hirshfield.
I like the repetition of “secrets”. It makes me wonder if there’s something more going on than just a marriage.
Thank you. I’ll just leave it open to your own interpretation. 😉
I like the way you use those secrets, and I wonder if this hasn’t happened before when love struck at secret places.
Thank you. I’m sure it happens all the time.
I had the same thought as Sarah. They were codebreakers after all, and who’s to say they were married, or to one another?
Thanks. I don’t really know either. I just imagined them as spies and codebreakers for some reason. :). I’ll leave it up to you.
It makes it more mysterious.
Oh good. 🙂
A lot of interesting back stories do present themselves; you rocked the prompt.
Thanks so much, Glenn! I just imagined them as spies/codebreakers. I have no idea why.
I like this one a lot. A unique take on the prompt. Well done!
Thank you so much!
I love that you met “Joe” for a cup of Joe and you’re still going strong. Great job, Merril! I enjoyed this one!
Thanks so much. Well, obviously it wasn’t me, but I’m glad you enjoyed it! I didn’t even think of cup of Joe. 🙂
🙂
There is a lot more to this story, and I love the way it leaves bread crumbs for us to follow and surmise their meaning.
Thank you, Linda. What a lovely comment!
Nice, there is just enough mystery to leave me wondering and filling in imagined blanks.
Happy you dropped by to read mine. I went back in and was able to edit to 143 words
Much❤love
Thank you for your lovely comment. I will look at yours again in the morning. Heading up to bed in a minute.
great mystery and intrigue … a vivid imagination and great prosery!
Thank you so much!
A lovely story……it happened that way with my one true love. I looked at him and KNEW.
Awww— that’s so sweet!
I like the codebreaker metaphor implanted in your love story. They understood each other’s language which makes for a tight bond.
Thank you very much. Yes, I suppose they did. 🙂
This is fab. I’m intrigued that we both used a wind in our pieces. How interesting!
Thank you! That is interesting. Often Jane and I write poems with similar words/themes. :). I’ll be by in a bit to read yours.
🙂 I know! The Universe has a sense of humor and she’d not afraid to use it, sneakily or not … 😉
Love your story and chosen artwork, Merril…codebreakers are good at deciphering secrets!
Thank you very much, Lynn!
I like the mystery inside your words. (K)
The image is stunning, Merril, a Hopper I hadn’t seen before. I like the way you started with the prompt quote and developed the story from there, like a private conversation, an interview or confession, which drew me in. I like the phrase ‘I was like the wind blowing in and out of places’ and the way you introduced Joe. The code breaker/spy theme reminded me of Mrs Wilson and another BBC series I enjoyed, but I can’t remember its name.
Thank you very much, Kim, for your close reading and lovely comments. I didn’t know that Hopper either, but for some reason I was thinking Hopper. (Oh maybe because I recently saw someone produced the famous Night Owls one with all the people gone.) Was it the Bletchly Circle show you were thinking of?
I think it might have been.
An excellent story which leaves some secrets intact
Thank you! (I see what you did there.) 🙂
They didn’t have to shake hands or use hand sanitizer to make contact in this fine piece. “Codebreakers” sharing secrets – perfect!
I was familiar with Hopper’s Nighthawks, but not this one inside the restaurant, which probably contained more than 10 (!) customers.
Thank you, Marian. 🙂
I didn’t know this painting either. I was just thinking Hopper and found it.
Someone shared on FB the Nighthawks painting that had been changed to an empty diner. I’ll see if I can find it.
I love this and the questions it prompts.
Thank you so much!
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I like your revelation of secrets along the way. It makes it all the mystifying and keeps the story lingering on. Great thoughts in the tale Merrill!
Hank
Thank you very much, Hank!
WOW! I wish I knew the rest of the story now. 🙂
Thanks so much, Rachel. I don’t even know it.😏. The prompt is still open if you want to join in the fun!
Very clever, with that last line.
Thank you, Ken! 😀
I like how they met. Nicely woven 😊
Pat
I like how they met. Nicely woven 😊
Pat
Thank you very much, Pat!
Ahhhh….thank you for the smile this morning. I LOVE LOVE LOVE this….and most especially that comparison to the breeze and the gale. 🙂
Thank you so much, Lillian! I’m glad I made you smile.
Exsquite! The mystery of their relationship leaves us wanting more. Well done!
Thank you very much, Frank!
Wonderful!
Thank you!
This is so very suggestive … could be 30 years of a marriage or 30 years of an office relationship … an “understanding,” that’s what makes me wonder if it’s a marriage. Funny, Della Street and Perry Mason just came to mind … lol 😉 Well done, Merril! The best stories are the ones that keep us guessing 🙂
Thank you. Yes, open to the reader. 😀. I was thinking of a romantic relationship, not sure if it’s a marriage or not.
I got goosebumps reading your prose, Merrill. Joe gives you a cup of Joe every morning for thirty years. Precious. ❤️
Aww–thank you, dear Rose!
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I love this!
Thank you! I had to go back and reread it. I like it, too. 😀
It’s always fun to go back and reread our work and go, Hey, this is pretty good!
It is!😀