Straying, never staying still,
shimmering beacons, they will
sway away eternity,
shine for sailors, as they flee—
steadfast light in vast night sea
streaming from Orion—gone–
seven sisters, sail to dawn.
For dVerse, Open Link Night, where Sanaa is hosting. I’ve missed the live meeting, but I got to talk to my sisters (and brother) via Zoom for Thanksgiving. Happy Thanksgiving to all who are celebrating! This poem responds to Laura’s dVerse prompt on Tuesday:
“Write a poem using the PLEIADES FORM. . .Pick a ONE-WORD TITLE then write a SEVEN-LINE poem of SEVEN SYLLABLES whereby each line begins with the FIRST LETTER of your title.”
This is breathtakingly beautiful, Merril! 😀 I love how brilliantly you have executed the Pleiades form. Missed you loads at the Live event. Hope your evening is wonderful 💝
Thank you so much, Sanaa!
I missed you, too. It was nice that we saw one daughter outside, and then did a family Zoom–another one tonight. It was certainly different with just my husband and me at the Thanksgiving table though.
I specially like: steadfast light in vast night sea. Lovely to see you write to this form (I did too). Happy Thanks giving!
Thank you so much, Grace!
OH, this is so beautiful! The rhyme scheme is brilliant and your take on the prompt is one of the best of the best that I’ve seen; I adore the alliteration, that was clever. I love the night, sailor, and sea imagery–something that I think I see at times in your work. Brilliantly penned, it’s truly an honor to read your poetry with the imagery you employ. ❤
Oh, Lucy–what a lovely comment. Thank you so much!
You’re right, I am drawn to water. I don’t know why, and I do write about the sea and sailors, though In know nothing about it really. 😀
Lovely piece Merril, the ‘s’ sounds work so well across the poem – particularly liked the movement in the verbs – sail, sway, streaming etc. adding a real dynamism to such a short piece.
Thank you very much, Peter.
Beautiful, Merril! Happy Thanksgiving!
Thank you very much, Jill!
Lovely poem and I think of friends as sisters like that. “They will sway away eternity”
Thank you–yes, I think you’re right. Those special friends.
I love your pleides for the Pleides, how they sail across the sky. Happy Thanksgiving, Merril!
Thank you very much, Liz. Happy Day After Thanksgiving (I hope yours was good)!
You’re welcome, Merril. It was a very low-key Thanksgiving this year. Hopefully, next year’s will be better.
Love this!! Wonderfully done.
Happy Thanksgiving!! (again)
Thank you very much, Dale!
I love the feeling of the moving stars in your poem! Very nicely done.
Thank you very much, Dwight.
Seven syllables and suitably sibilant. So well done
Thank you so much, Derrick! 😀
Beautifully done … and they do shine in the dark sky!
Thank you very much, Frank!
I love the way your Pleiad shimmers, Merril!
Thank you so much, Kim!
and it rhymes!!!
It does! 😀
That is what I call clever!
Sisters! I have two, those face to face chats made Thanksgiving separation more bearable. We live in different States. Your poem is precious.
Thank you very much! Not getting to see or hug our loved ones this year is very difficult.
Wonderful rhythm surrounding the images (and a star prompt…how could we go wrong?) (K)
Thank you so much, Kerfe. You’re right. 😀
I like the scope and energy of this Merril, wrll written… 🙂
Thank you so much, Rob!
Sway away eternity, really love that line especially!
Thank you very much, Lona!
Thank you very much, Jude!
A poem that fits the poem perfectly. Well done, Merril.
Thank you, Ken.
That’s supposed to be “fits the FORM perfectly.”
Comments at 3 in the morning!
I figured that’s what you meant. Thank you for reading and commenting at that time of the morning.