
Where do the shadows go,
when mist obscures the shifted light?
And dreams heart-drift, then flow
owl-feathered into the night.
When mist obscures the shifted light,
watch the sea reflect the clouds, they race
owl-feathered into the night
to another time. In another space,
watch the sea reflect the clouds, they race,
tossing spindrift to the sky—
to another time, in another space,
uniting, or they forever fly,
tossing spindrift to the sky—
and dreams (too), heart-drift then flow
uniting, or they forever fly–
where? Do the shadows (ever) go?
A pantoum for dVerse. Peter has asked us to think about endings for our last prompt of 2020. He tells us “2020 has been an amazing year. Here at Dverse we’ve published nearly 150 prompts, and you, our beloved poets, have written and shared well-over 3000 poems in response.” I will have some time to catch-up on reading before we return on January 4, 2021!
WOW. This is such remarkable writing. You have me wondering where DO the shadows go and if they ever truly leave? Great piece, Merril!
Thank you so much, Lucy!
I’m one of those people who always thinks she sees things in the shadows, so . . .😏
I really love the thought … and with a pantoun and its repetition you turn that question over and over… the mist steals the shadows I think
Thank you very much! Yes, the mist steals them–but they come back. 😏
I love pantoum poems and you’ve written a masterful example of the form here, Merril. I like how you’ve played with the punctuation to alter the meaning of the lines, and used enjambment to enhance the flow of the poem. I think the insertion of that final (ever) really brings it home.
Thank you so much, Ingrid.
It was a last minute addition, but I thought it needed that ever.
I absolutely love this poem and its pleasant flow and rhyme. I agree about the last “ever” … perfect!
Thank you so much, Beverly!
Big kudos for a pantoum 👏 (among many golden garden implements) – and isn’t it such a fine form – never proceeding, returning again and again – though different each time – recursive, obsessive, marvellous.
Thank you very much, Peter. 😀
Beautiful metaphysics and the questions asked are served well by the form. Happy Holidays, Merril. See you in 2021!
Thank you, Lisa. Happy holidays and all the best for 2021!
You’re welcome.
Beautiful, Merril. I love the photo…it’s a perfect fit with your poem.
Thank you very much, Jill.
Now you have me wondering about where indeed do the shadows go? Or do they go anywhere, perhaps they’re always there. I love this poem, so perfectly rendered in my favorite form. And that photo! It’s beautiful ❤️
Thank you so much, Marie!! ❤️
Such clever twist on the refrain: where? Do the shadows (ever) go? Lovely pantoum form Merril. Thank you for being part of our team and our poetry community. Cheers!!
Thank you so much, Grace. Cheers to you, too!
Beautiful thoughts and so well written. For me, your opening image provided a wonderful setting and I like the rhythm/pacing of your worlds.
Thank you very much, Frank. I appreciate that. 😀
I love that line: they race
owl-feathered into the night
It just struck me in such a way…
Thank you! I appreciate that you told me that line resonated with you.
I love the way each stanza refines the question (with the shifted light). (K)
Thank you very much, Kerfe!
I so love this pantoum. Beautifully done!
Thank you so much, Dale!
I will try to write one, one day… 😉
That first line just came to me, and I went from there. Modern pantoums don’t have to rhyme.
Giving me an out, are ya? 😉
Which is great… I’m not so fab at the rhyme thing!
A lot of people don’t like writing rhymed poetry, and I’ve read several pantoums recently and none of them were rhymed, so I thought I’d mention it. 😀
I admit I was never a fan of poetry before, thinking it all had to rhyme… and then was introduced to you and Mary Oliver and various others. Suddenly, it was accessible to me 🙂
Wow–putting me right up there with Mary Oliver. 😏. Thank you, I’m glad I could help in some small way. To be honest, I didn’t read or know very much about poetry until the last few years.
Why not?
I’m completely new to enjoying poetry thanks to you. And I was introduced to Mary Oliver through a couple more bloggers. I’ve got a few poetry books at home that remained largely unopened!
😀
Well done Merril. The shadows are always there!!
Thank you very much, Dwight!
I love pantoums, especially when they are so beautifully written, Merril! The opening question, so pertinent, flits gently through the whole poem. I love the phase ‘dreams heart-drift’ and the lines:
‘watch the sea reflect the clouds, they race,
tossing spindrift to the sky—
to another time, in another space’.
Thank you so much, Kim! I’m so pleased you liked the poem.
Just lovely! 🙂
Thank you very much, Linda!
Speechless, but I can manage to say, Brilliant!
Wow! Thank you very much!
Your pantoum is beautiful! A splendid way to wind down 2020 and dVerse. Where do the shadows go … hoping 2020 dark shadows melt away in 2021. Happy Holidays Merril.
Aww–thank you so much, Helen! Happy holidays to you, too!
Excellent response to Peter’s wonderful prompt Merril. Hope you have a great holiday season, and look forward to reading more of your work in 2021.
Thank you very much, Rob. Happy holidays to you. See you in 2021!
The shadows won’t go anywhere
Thank you.
Always welcome
There are times when the repetition in a pantoum is the focus, and there is this. It flows so smoothly from beginning to end, and though it has the repetition it’s not a distraction.
And, “Do the shadows (ever) go?” Perhaps they’re a part of what’s to come.
Thank you very much, Ken. That’s such a nice thing to say! That’s interesting about the shadows–perhaps they are.
Beautifully constructed 🧡
Thank you, Jude!
My pleasure Merrild
I love your pantoun, the question posed by the first two lines in particular. I think “spindrift” may become one of my new favorite words.
Thank you so much, Liz.
Spindrift is a wonderful word, isn’t it?!
You’re welcome, Merril! I’m always on the lookout for wonderful words.
😀
Beautiful pantoun and love your word “spindrift”. A well-crafted piece, Merril. Wishing you a joyous holiday season.
Wonderful!
You are not only talented, but you are in sync with a universe around you.
Hahaha. Thank you! 😀
Merril, this is so lovely. Shadows are a frame, a follower, attached to wahtever blocks the light, the mist gives a dissipated shadow to the edges and the lines blocking that light, the sun sweatings, they (n)ever leave us then, dreams, they are another question, occurring in the rounded calvaria, where all light has been dissipated and transposed already by the retina, they are the imprint of the shadows and the light and the mist, and this that I see is there right in there, not where I see it, so my answer is no answer really. I had an Earth Science teacher in 8th grade who asked us, “Where does all the white go when the snow melts?” So we consider these colors, these shadows, these reflections the thing itself, and perhaps they are. Shifting with the light, circling round with the sun or its hiding spaces, I guess we are the thing, at least for a while. This poem is a lovely thing. Thank you for it. 🙂
Thank you so much for your lovely, thoughtful comment, Lona. 💙 I hope you have a happy holiday.
Thank you, it is a very nice holiday, I hope your are happy as well! 🙂