place, my house, but not—see
the walls dissolve, and I
am someone else
myself, I am
within, without—I am
fixed and infinite, I
For Colleen’s Tanka Tuesday challenge. The theme is dreams, which I love, because I often remember my dreams, and I often lucid dream. This is a double Badger’s Hexastitch: a six-line poem 2/4/6/6/4/2 syllables, unrhymed. I think each poem can stand alone. I don’t know if I did these correctly. 😀
Oooh… I love this, Merril. Like standing outside of your body watching yourself. I love that feeling.
Thank you so much, Dale! I do, too.
And another form for me to try! Sheesh…
I think both poems stand alone but they go perfectly together!
Thank you, Ingrid. Excellent–just what I wanted. 😀
Yes, they definitely can stand alone. Nicely done, Merril. I wish I could remember my dreams more than I do.
Thank you, Jill. My husband never remember his. The other night I was dreaming, and there was a something roaring within the dream. I’m not sure if it was a machine or a creature, but I woke up, and it was my cat snoring right next to me.🤣
You’ve captured dreaming beautifully-
Thank you very much, Susan!
You’ve really produced the feeling of a dream. I mostly remember fragments which are just on the edge of my waking mind, but every once in awhile my dreams take me someplace more solid. Those stay with me for a long time. (K)
Thank you. Yes, I know what you mean.
Very dreamlike…For me, these poems sort of capture that state when you are still asleep, but almost awake. I do remember many of my dreams. I should write them down because I forget later.
Thank you. Yes, that’s probably when I remember the dreams–the ones right before I wake up. I only remember them if I really think about them and keep thinking about them.
I sometimes feel as though I’m standing outside my body, observing. Right now I feel tired, maybe the tiredness that will promote sleep – and dreaming. Thank you!
Thank you very much, Marian. Sweet dreams!
I’ve never written a hexastitch. Looks like fun. I love the inside out imagery in yours.
Thank you very much!
I often feel very constrained by forms like this, but I like to try them sometimes.
I feel the same, but sometimes magic happens when there are a few restraints in place, like your current poem.
Aww–thank you! That’s very kind. 💙
You’re very welcome.
Absolutely brilliant writing, Merril. I love your use of the painting and how you slipped into another space and time. The hexastich is a fun form. It seems there are various ways to write it, so I would say just about anything goes. It’s open to interpretation. ❤
Thank you so much, Colleen. It’s how I often feel while dreaming. Though I’ve also had dreams where I knew I was dreaming–and I thought while I was dreaming that the dream was funny. Like part of me was laughing inside, even while the dream was going on.
I chose the painting afterward, but it does fit.
I totally understand. If I’m reading an enganging book, I dream about it and replay much of it in my mind. Sometimes I slip between the pages, myself. I’ve not been doing enough day dreaming… I need to find the time to let my thoughts wander. More walks! 😀 ❤
I like it, poems about dreams are so powerful and infinite!!
Thank you very much!
I especially like the first one.
Splendid out of body experience. No idea about the technicality but I know what I like
Thank you so much, Derrick!
For me, the first poem is a bit stronger to stand on its own.
Thank you, Liz.
You’re welcome, Merril.
I loved it, Merril! Your use of the comma and em dash was brilliant. 😀 xo
Thank you so much, Vashti! I like punctuation in my poetry. 😀 I’m pleased you liked it!
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got here from the pingback ’56-Dreams’ excellent!
Thank you so much for checking out my dream poem and leaving a comment, Laura!