The Tapping Rain

The rain tapped on the windowpane–sustained
pitter-pats–that rapping tap in dark-winged night—
come soon the mockingbird, his song unchained

from cold bleak flight, the sun once bold reclaims
his hold to rule the day and send bright light—
the rain tapped on the windowpane–sustained

again. My sleep is fraught with nightmare-strained
brain-thoughts of ghosts, lovers from books, daylight
come soon. The mockingbird, his song unchained

in spring, he sings for love, bares soul till drained
yet still, goes on with song for hours, fights
the rain, tapped on the windowpane, sustained

by this or that, but love keeps him maintained
as days grow long, desire longer, flight
come soon. The mockingbird, his song unchained

is but a dream, desire ascertained?
but cold, the fingers rap—enough! All right!
The rain tapped on the windowpane—sustained—
come soon, the mockingbird, his song unchained.

A villanelle for dVerse for Ingrid’s prompt on iambic pentameter. I’m sure it needs work, but I finally got a draft, so this will do for now. I used Sarah’s template to write the villanelle.

A few nights ago, the rain hitting the window made me think of Catherine’s ghost in Wuthering Heights, and then the mockingbirds I’ve been seeing–though not yet singing for hours–gave me the other recurring line.

42 thoughts on “The Tapping Rain

  1. again. My sleep is fraught with nightmare-strained
    brain-thoughts of ghosts, lovers from books, daylight
    come soon. The mockingbird, his song unchained

    The internal rhyme in this stanza is so good, Merril! Just – wow.

    -David

  2. Whenever I think ‘tapping at the window’ I think Wuthering Heights too. I’m glad you finished it, and I’m glad you wrote a villanelle. I wonder of that’s why I gave up on it and wrote a triolet instead? Because you were running away with the window-tapper? I’m impressed anyway 🙂

  3. I thought more of Poe than Wuthering Heights but maybe because I’m more inclined toward the morbid 😉 I love this poem, its ghostly atmosphere and wordplay. I agree with Dale. It’s not a draft. 🙂

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