This August or Another? Stuck in Time that Passes in a Flash
She says eat the cherries,
but as she sneezes,
and I look at the dirty bowl,
I don’t feel neighborly anymore.
Promises are scattered,
like crumbs for fish
in the pond–
Gabby Giffords* is still fighting
for gun control
My cat rubs with pleasure,
his chin to my chin
he watches me with giant eyes
attentive as a mind-reader.
At the precipice,
do we accept the inevitable,
or turn to stride through dust clouds
looking for the trail
The air is electric,
we wait for an exciting answer
to the sky’s question–
lighting to thunder,
the illumination of mystery.
*Gabby Giffords is a former representative from Arizona who was shot in the head in January 2011 in a mass shooting that killed six people and injured others. She and her husband have become outspoken advocates for gun control.
Early morning brain-starter using Jane’s Random Words. This is perhaps not imagist enough to be a cadralor? I’m never certain.
Cadralor or not, I enjoyed this, particuarly the last two stanzas.
Thank you very much, Liz. As often happens with these, the last stanza was the one I wrote first! 🙂
We chose a lot of the same words, and we both had the scattered promises (and the cherries).
I’d say it’s a cadralor. Each stanza is distinct. I think my favourite is the last one. It brings all the questions in the other stanzas to one final question, that nobody can answer. The mystery remains.
The final stanza is the one that I wrote first. For some reason I saw “exciting answer” first. I’m pleased you think it works.🙂
I saw that too and thought I was going to end up with a poem about questions and answers…but I didn’t.
Yes, it works for me!
I wrote that one for you, and you wrote about the heron my husband has been seeing. 🙂
So we kept the circle going 🙂
Eating cherries captured my attention, but the cat stanza touched my heart. Well done, Merril.
Thank you, Frank. 🙂
Expert that I am (😉) I would call it a cadralor. But no matter what, it’s wonderful.
Thank you very much! 😊 💙
Thoughtful and beautifully written 💖
Thank you so much, Rene! 💙
As you know, I don’t know about the form, but this is an excellent collection, each evoking a different mood.
Thank you so much, Derrick. That’s exactly what the form should do–separate images with the last one tying them together.
It’s hard for me to pick a favorite here, but I agree about the beauty in the final stanza. The first four are the truth. (K)
Thank you so much, Kerfe!
I think this is a great cadralor! Speaking of which, issue 5 opens for submissions on 1 September…😊
Thank you, Ingrid!
Yes, every time I write one, I’m reminded that I should write some that I don’t post. 😏
Haha – me too! 😅
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superb and a great cadralor! 💖💖
Thank you so much, Cindy! 💙
The cat is wondering when you, in turn, will be able to read his mind. From my own experience, that is never going to happen. 😉
Hahaha. But I keep trying! 🤣