For dVerse. The challenge was to write a poem composed of last lines. These are last lines from recent poems on my blog. I didn’t like the first version I wrote, but I’m still not sure if it works.
There, Not There
Yesterday and today: Merril's historical musings
Yesterday and today: Merril's historical musings 
It works beautifully, the enjambment especially!
Thank you so much, Helen!
It’s interesting how my lines work together. 😊
Beautiful, teasing and romantic, Merril! Love that last stanza especially 🙂
Thank you very much, Sunra! 😊
I love it! Especially the third verse
Thank you very much! 😊
You are welcome Merril!
A very creative creation, Merril. Well done.
Thank you very much, Dwight!
Magical! The form works so well with the title and haunting imagery. Well done! 👏👏
Thank you so much, Tricia! 💙
I think it works quite well.
Thank you, Ken.
dreamy and magical… soft, ethereal – and the form! LOVE it all and the painting. Masterful.
Thank you very much!
What an interesting challenge! You definitely rose to it, Merril 😊
Thank you very much, Ingrid! 🙂
Beautiful imagery
Thank you, Derrick. 🙂
what a clever and imaginative poem you have construed Merril – as always you offer up something to delight the reader
Thank you so much, Laura! 😊
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Thank you!
It does work, perfectly, as a contrapuntal poem, the conversation back and forth. And your lines express the way your poetic mind works, so there’s a sense of cohesion in it anyway. This is a real poem that stands in its own light.
Thank you!
I wrote it in regular stanzas first, and I just didn’t think it quite worked, so I changed it to the contrapuntal and added the first line. I’m glad you think it’s a “real poem!”
It is. A real conversation.
Thank you. 😊
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It is enchanted! ❤
"The things just beyond sight"
Thank you very much, Kerfe! 💙
This comes together very nicely into a well-unified poem. I had no idea it was an assemblage of last lines from other poems. Brava!
Thank you so much, Liz! 😊
You’re welcome, Merril!
Wonderfully written, I especially liked the closing lines. I enjoyed the rhythmic assembly of words visually as well.
Thank you so much! 😊
This conversation works so well and the closing lines are perfect! Beautiful, Merril. 💙
Thank you very much, Punam. I’m so pleased you think so! 💙
The things beyond sight…they are always there in your words. (K)
I suppose they are! Thank you very much, Kerfe.
I love the format and placement of the words. Slanted words in slanted light – awesome writing here!
Thank you so much, Grace!
Oh this is gorgeously composed, Merril! 😍😍
Thank you, Sanaa. 💙
Perfect – especially ‘She remembers every time/ the things just beyond sight’ ❤
Thank you so much! 💙
So moving Merril, and the form worked brilliantly.
Thank you very much, Paul! 😊
Welcome Merril 🙂
The way you used it with this additional form made it even better.
Thank you very much!
I was determined to have it make sense. 😊
The formatting fit perfectly for this lovely poem, Merril.
Thank you so much! 😊