the frosted rose
smiles bravely at the world,
lip-sticked mouth in fragile face says
I’ve seen her. Women in shops, on streets, in care homes, on TV. My mother.
Perhaps someday me.
For Tanka Tuesday. This week an ekphrastic prompt. This photo by Terri Webster Schrandt
Terri says: “This is a filtered version of a rose I photographed at the International Rose Test Garden in Portland.”
Colleen and I were discussing Crapsey cinquains, so here is one by me with prose to make it a cinquain haibun. Is that a thing? Neither is a style I write much of. Weird pre-dawn writing. 😂 Perhaps I was also thinking about this forthcoming anthology by Annick Yerem. I have a poem in it about my mom. Annick writes, “the drawing on the cover is by Katherine Inglis-Meyer. She is a former teacher and editor living with dementia. She is also my mum.”
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Thank you, Michael!
Thanks as well for sharing great thoughts again, Merril! xx Michael
Thank you so much, Michael. 💙
I like the metaphoric approach you took because I didn’t expect it when I saw the title. 🙂
Thank you, Frank. I’m pleased you liked it. 🌹
‘lip-sticked mouth in fragile face’
Thank you so much, Patricia! 🌹
Oh, this poem is beautiful, Merril! May we all smile bravely at the world and say, “Still here.” Great poem!
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
Thank you so much for your very kind words, Yvette! 😊
Oh, my goodness–how perfect!
Wow! Thank you, Marian. 💙
This is absolutely beautiful, Merril. I love it. And I think it’s a lovely thing!
Aww–thank you, Dale! 💙
So clever–and beautiful, Merril! I love it! ❤️
Thank you so much, Gwen! 💙
I know those women too. I don’t wear make up, but I feel the need for extra fortitude as I get older–I understand that impulse. Just to be acknowledged, noticed. (K)
Thank you. Yes, that’s it exactly.
I seldom wear make-up. Just sometimes for special occasions.
A moving metaphor, Merril – I was also touched by Annick’s description of the cover art ❤️
Thank you so much, Ingrid. ❤️
Such a sad poem, Merril. It’s so hard to see the aging of our parents–and then of ourselves, too. My mom is finally planning to move into a small apartment in the “big house” at her community from her garden home. I’ll get to see her right before she goes. It takes a lot of bravery to get old. So many are called upon to be that brave :). And I do love the form you created.
Congrats on the anthology inclusion!!
Thank you so much for your thoughtful reading and comment, Luanne.
Good luck to your mom, Luanne. I’m glad you’ll be able to see her. I hope she’s happy there.
Thank you about the anthology. This is the first book Annick is publishing from her new press.
Very exciting!!! Thank you about my mom. I know she’s scared and nervous, but the thought of a small apartment nestled into the big house sounds very comforting to her, I think.
I think if she’s able to get about, and unlike my mom, can see, then it’s a good situation. You get privacy, but also whatever is offered by “the big house.”
I think so, too. Plus she gets a meal a day there as part of the fee, and she doesn’t eat enough now because she doesn’t want to cook or eat alone. So it will be good in that respect, too.
That sounds very similar to what my mom had. She usually went down to dinner.
Merril, you’ve capture the spirit of the cinquain… Adelaide Crapsey is smiling down on us! I just finished a post about the Crapsey and the American cinquain. I can’t get those iambs… but if you can, WOO HOO! What I loved about your poem is you said so much in only a few words. That is the essence of the form. This cinquain is powerful and every woman can connect to your meaning. Your imagery comparing an aging woman to the frosted rose‚—It’s stunning. 🌹
Thank you so much, Colleen, for your kind words! 🌹
I got the meter right on some of the lines. 🙂 I really wanted to have a good sound and rhythm with this, not just syllables.
You did an excellent job. ❤️
Eerie in its beauty, you’ve captured the frosted rose perfectly with your words.
(PS – did you see “River Ghosts” reviewed on “Myths of the Mirror”? It’s fab. https://mythsofthemirror.com/2023/01/31/january-book-reviews-3/)
Thank you very much, Resa! 💙
And thank you for letting me know about the review, too. I just went over there.
This poem is why I like your poetry so much, Merril. It’s sweet and brave and heartbreaking and full of love too. Beautiful.
Thank you very much, Diana. 😊
This poem went straight to my heart. I was very moved by it. The short form works perfectly. No other words need be said.
Congratulations on your anthology inclusion!
Oh, thank you so much, Liz! I’m pleased my poem touched you so.
And thank you about the anthology.
You’re welcome, Merril!
Wow, this is great. Exactly perfectly said.
Thank you so much, Claudia! 💙
Beautiful. May we all find that strength.
Thank you very much. Yes. 😊
Loved your Cinquain- Haibun, Merril. 🙂
Thank you so much! 🙂
Congratulations on the anthology! 🙂
Thank you! 🙂
Marvellous metaphor. Mind you, I can’t imagine it will one day be you
Thank you so much, Derrick. 💙
Congratulations!!! This poem is beautiful also!
Thank you so much, Linda! 😊
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Merril – this metaphor is simply ingenious.
Thank you so much, David! 🌹
This is really thoughtful. Brilliant. 😀
Thank you so much! 😊