Garden at Giverny
Tree-strewn, dappled light, a caress
of ancient star-song
rests in pink-
of ancient star-songs–
For Colleen’s Tanka Tuesday Ekphrastic Challenge, I played with the Fibonacci (or Fib) form, reversing it (8, 5, 3,2,1,1) and then repeating patterns, lines, and words. The prompt image is the above painting by Claude Monet.
Thank you! 🌸
I like the way you made this form yours, Merril. It’s fabulous. It feels ethereal. I also like how you emphasized the feelings of home reflective in Monet’s painting. I feel that too. (My step-mother was a lot of things… but she was a master gardener. I thought of her garden immediately).
Thank you so much, Colleen!
I’m pleased you liked what I did with the form, and I like the way it came out. My math-teacher husband appreciated it, too. 😂
Many of Monet’s paintings have a sort of ethereal feel–the light and catching an ephemeral moment.
I am not a gardener, but I love gardens.
I agree… I’m not much of a gardener. I only dabble. But I enjoy the beauty of a garden.
Thank you, Patricia!
Lovely form and flow!
Thank you so much!
It fits the mood well. I especially like the sense of calling of the second verse. Well done, Merril.
Thank you very much, Frank!
Beautifully done, Merril. I love the form and you made it work perfectly with the gorgeous painting.
Thank you so much, Dale. 😊
My pleasure, Merril!
Loving the delicate flow of this poem and the gorgeous way it evokes such natural imagery! ❤
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I love the idea of dappled light being of ancient star songs coming home to earth … (if you pardon the pun) – stellar – and the softness you’ve captured here, the dreaminess is …. delicious. 🙂
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I like the idea of flowers being the songs of ancient stars. Very beautiful way of looking at them.
Thank you so much, Lisa! 😊
You’re very welcome.
I would say that your poem channels Monet himself as he gazed upon his garden and transferred his vision to canvas.
Wow–that is quite an amazing thought and compliment, Liz. Thank you!
You’re welcome, Merril!
Dappled light is perfect. (K)
Thank you, Kerfe.
For once the picture comes first – and you have done it proud
Thank you so much, Derrick.
I’m glad you used this form. I like the result! Funny coincidence, yesterday husband showed me a sketch for that painting he thought was lovely. It’s part of an exhibition that’s the background to a week of Debussy concerts at the Jardin de Luxembourg.
I like how it turned out, too.
That is a funny coincidence. I can see where this painting–and much of Monet’s work would go with Debussy. And set in a garden, too!
It is. It was on the national radio’s website. They were broadcasting one of the concerts.
It sounds lovely, dreamy. 😊
Music and paintings often work well together 🙂
Beautiful poem, Merril!
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
Love how the form fits the theme so well, beautiful just like the garden ❤️
Thank you so much! 💙
It was fun to play with this form.
This is beautiful. I’ll definitely be trying the Fibonacci in the future.🌻
Thank you, Jude. I wasn’t as thrilled with the straight Fibonacci form, but I like how this one turned out with the repeating lines.
Whatever you did to the Fibonacci, I love this poem!
Thank you so much! 😊
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Splendid writing, Merril. 🙂
Thank you so much, Kitty! 😊
This is very beautiful, Merril.
Thank you very much, Roberta. 😊
A beautiful and delicate poem, Merril. Just lovely.
Thank you so much, D.! 💙