Cranes
Lyrical afterthoughts, these cranes
zephyr-cast across
miles. Paper
creatures,
sun-
caught
zephyr-cast across
river-moods,
shades of
blue
dream
miles. Paper
weathered
with
time,
creatures
sun-
caught–
gone.
I thought I’d try this form again using some words from Kerfe’s Random words. As soon as I saw “paper creatures,” I imagined a flock of paper cranes.
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Oh yes! I love this! So much fun. And a cool poetry form, too… Must note it 😉
Thank you! 😊
I’m not so thrilled with the straight Fibonacci form, but I saw Jane had reversed it, and then combined it with the trimeric form.
My pleasure.
And now, you have completely lost me! I’ll have to do more studying…
Sorry! So, instead of 1,1,2,3,5,8, etc. I went 8, 5, 3, 2, 1, 1 for the first stanza. Then I took the second line of the first stanza, which was 5 syllables to begin the next stanza. Then the third line of the first stanza, which was 3 syllables, for the third stanza, etc.
I know it’s confusing. 😉
I did get the pattern, and I saw you used the second line, then the third line. I now see what you mean by saying you merged two styles (while inversing the Fibonacci). I like the long to short lines. I’d have to look at more to see… Oh, the things you teach me!
You’re welcome. 😏
😊
“Lyrical Afterthoughts” would make a great title for a poety collection!
It would! 🙂
🙂
I imagined an origami crane. (Thanks for the prompt.)
I’ll leave the form and meter to you and the other poets, Merril!
Thank you, Marian. 🙂
Well done 🙂 It is good that you can do sums as well
Thank you, Derrick.
I really can’t. I have to write out the number sequences in advance, and then I count syllables on my fingers. 😂
🙂
Your poetic imagination worked. 🙂
Thank you, Frank. 🙂
You have your poetry forms done to a science. This is beautiful!
Thank you very much, Rene! 😊
🙂 🙂 🙂 I liked this one!
I’m pleased you did! Thank you. 🙂
Beautiful idea, those cranes! I didn’t even notice the ‘paper creatures’. The Oracle must have averted my gaze because they were for you.
I see what you mean about the message, and yes, the zephyr! But I’ve been back to check, and the main theme, time isn’t one of the words…
That is funny–or not. 🙂
A saw paper creatures right away, and then I picked a few other words the fit.
I suppose that’s how it works. I wouldn’t like to have to make a poem using all the words.
No, I wouldn’t either.
This is a lovely form, made even lovelier by your words, Merril! ❤️
That is so kind, Punam! Thank you!❤️