Asking
I ask the stars to grant me gifts,
to make time slide, to make it shift—
as grass turns green, and then it fades,
an imprint left within mind’s shade
holds fast. Now leaves in fall’s winds drift—
I ask the stars to grant me gifts
of poetry and light so blue–
on riverbank, pink blossoms strewn,
a carpet for the squirrels and deer
to scatter as they scamper here.
I ask the stars to grant me gifts,
to bind me when strong forces rift
the shore and sea, cause winds to howl
and whip the clouds to make them scowl—
then I’ll exist when shadows lift–
I ask the stars—this–grant me gifts.
A quatrain for dVerse. Rhyme is not required. I used a few words from Oracle I and from Kerfe’s Oracle 2 random words.
Maybe this poem is connected to my poem yesterday about the Oracle.
Yesterday and today: Merril's historical musings 
Lovely rhythm! And your stars 🙂
Thank you! Maybe I’m extra obsessed with stars because I’m such a morning person.
I’m glad you’re able to leave comments. 😊
You should be an insomniac person then you could look at them all night 🙂
I’m afraid the problem hasn’t gone away. I can’t like your blog or follow it, and I can only leave a comment by logging in each time.
I think I’ll stay with NOT being an insomniac! 😂
I hope you can find a fix for the blog problems. 😔
Don’t blame you!
I’ve sent WP a chaser. Still no reply from them.
I hope they get back to you with a solution!
Me too!
🙂
I like your use of rhyme with this form, especially blue and strewn.
Thank you so much!
I really like your use of rhyme and meter, particularly in the first stanza.
Thank you very much, Liz!
I thought it would add to the form. 😊
You’re welcome, Merril!
Love the movement here, the repeating of the first line. And I love the gifts being asked for 🙂
Thank you very much, Marie! 😊
Very well done, Merril. I love the rhyming scheme as well.
Thank you very much, Dwight!
You are welcome.
You always create such wonderful rhythm. The repeated line is a jewel.
I wrote something with a very similar feeling. Not sure if I’ll get it posted tonight. (K)
Thank you very much, Kerfe! 💙
I will watch for yours.
Another gem, Merril!
This one has more of a rhyme thing happening, than oft.
I must go see if it is connected to yesterday’s.
Love the painting.
Thank you!
Yes, I thought rhyme and meter would add to the form. 💙
Prose and exotic forms are popular now.
However, rhyme and meter are classic to my background.
There was a time poetry with all its rhyme and meter was the entertainment of its day.
Just ask the troubadours and minstrels!
Ask Shakespeare!
The discipline of rhyme and meter help one read how the writer intended.
I adore all forms, but this is wonderful sometimes. 💙
Thank you, Resa!
Rhyme and meter are classics, and there are good and bad, as with any type of poetry. I like repeating lines, too. 💙
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I enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme in your Quatern, Merril, the use of colour in the lines:
‘I ask the stars to grant me gifts
of poetry and light so blue–
on riverbank, pink blossoms strewn’
and the sound and motion in:
‘the shore and sea, cause winds to howl
and whip the clouds to make them scowl’.
Thank you very much, Kim. I’m so pleased you did!
You’re welcome!
Merril, this poem bobs and streams in the most gracious light. Beautiful.
Thank you so much! 😊
With such rhythm your rhyme is never forced. I so enjoy your choice of illustration. I had a client, a very talented painter himself, of Odilon Redon, who introduced me to the artist years ago.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Derrick.
Thank you for letting me know about your client. And I’ve seen that you have artistic skill, too, Derrick!
🙂
Great work with the form, Merril – the enjambment creates a beautiful flow!
Thank you very much, Ingrid! 😊
Love this, Merril. Beautiful rhythm and the refrain is lovely. ❤️
Thank you so much, Punam! ❤️
My pleasure. 😊
I love the rhyme and rhythm of this one. It had a sing-songy feel to it. To the stars – may they always grant us gifts!
Thank you very much, Dale! 😊
You are most welcome!
Beautiful poem with exquisite imagery Merril! the flow and feel is wonderful!❣️
Thank you so much for reading and leaving such a lovely comment, Cindy! ❤️
It was my pleasure Merril. Your work is lovely! 💞
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“I ask the stars to grant me gifts
of poetry and light so blue–
on riverbank, pink blossoms strewn,
a carpet for the squirrels and deer
to scatter as they scamper here.”
❤️
Thank you! ❤️
Asking the stars for grants of gifts … oh my, the possibilities are as endless as the Milky Way. I love your poem, Ms. Merril.
Thank you so much, Helen! 💙
Another great one.
Thank you.
The gift of being present in order to observe and experience. ❤
Yes, thank you very much! 😊
Absolutely enjoyed this poem. You had me at the first line. The stars are magical and I often find myself making a wish on the first one I see at night.
Thank you so much! 😊 🌟
Splendid. You nailed this form
Much💖love
Thank you very much, Gillena! 💙
I love that the stars grant your wishes.
Thank you. 🙂